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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #495 on: June 13, 2016, 06:37:26 pm »
Silver, just a small thing, try not to use other's main characters as much. Need some cohesion and be in character.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #496 on: June 13, 2016, 07:52:40 pm »
I'm tempted to write a comical double take as to how he got in Frey's quarters.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #497 on: June 13, 2016, 07:59:29 pm »
I'm an enabler, do it! But Hold off for a bit, almost done with my post.

Edit: Post out, go nuts.
« Last Edit: June 13, 2016, 08:06:23 pm by Piemanlives »

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #498 on: June 13, 2016, 09:16:35 pm »
Alright trying to figure out who is who. I needed someone who was in charge. But how well did I do Frey's personality.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #499 on: June 14, 2016, 06:23:19 pm »
I think I found what Emil wrote in his letter to Frey

''Sent from: Lord Emil Maximillian Istvan Llewelyn Von Ansager, Guardian of Cainhurst, Protector of Cainhurst, Knight of Ravenrook, Captain of the King's Navy, Lieutenant of the King's Army, Paladin of the Crown, Agent of C.R.I.E.S., et cetera.
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Selenia, Lieutenant of the King's Army, Agent of C.R.I.E.S., et cetera.

We, with great joy, want to ask to Mr. Frey of the Eagle's Shadow to let us and our companion join the crew of thy vessel, as we found great pleasure with our stay.
Also, methinks we are worthy companions for thy expedition, as our enemies are in common and many a nuisance they had caused to us all.
We recognize our first appearence might have caused quite the ruckus for a while.
Lord Ansager's presence might also have caused some problems.
He whishes to make ammend to his appearing and behaviour a la wild card.
Miss. Selenia humbly asks to be accepted as a gunner among the Eagle's crew, she believes that her natural ability to use well a gun and keep it functioning are to be respected as also her aim is as fine as her face.
Lord Von Ansager formally requests to be part of the Eagle's flight wing, if not as a pilot, at least as a backup one.
Also he asks to be welcomed among the crewmen as a cook and armsman too, as his cooking skills are as good as his prowess in fighting.
Also, we, with utmost sorrow, grieve on the losses the ship has suffered, and as such we are willing to spare some of our fortune to the cause, to help get the ship ready, the planes in the air, the food on the tables and the men at work.

The Baronies send their regards.
''

There was also a raven sigil on the letter, apparently.


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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #500 on: June 19, 2016, 03:18:03 pm »
lol, Carn we are down to around 2 and a half with Reagan's craft

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #501 on: June 19, 2016, 03:20:07 pm »
Actually we have 3 excluding Reagan's.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #502 on: June 19, 2016, 04:10:04 pm »
i counted the squid as half, it is still flying but heavily damaged

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #503 on: June 19, 2016, 04:25:40 pm »
Oh I thought we were talking about planes there. Still, my point stands. I should finish my post in a bit though.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #504 on: June 19, 2016, 05:39:10 pm »
Optimistic omitting to cover up for my memory lapse, anyways, mercenaries, used to be told better odds then they have (or at least we can make interesting dialogue concerning that), anyways, the influx of engineers should serve to lighten some strain.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #505 on: June 20, 2016, 03:57:11 pm »
So uh, lost my post to a browser crash and didn't save the hard copy I had, will be rewriting it.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #506 on: June 20, 2016, 04:27:04 pm »
Ouch......

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #507 on: June 22, 2016, 03:25:43 pm »
Finally finished rewriting it, had to cut some of the other perspectives I was planning on writing but this big chunk was really hard to write and I just wanted it done, I'll write up the other things I was planning and post them later.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #508 on: June 27, 2016, 01:21:14 pm »
I am temporarily resurrected to tell you that I'm not 100% dead.
I didn't post for a while, and I'm not gonna post for a little longer, due to some shenanigans.

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Re: Cantina Writing Discussions
« Reply #509 on: June 27, 2016, 01:36:37 pm »
I feel like I should tell you Mr. Owl is a smuggler. And I'm planning a sub plot around that. I don't what best practice is for introducing it. Also open to suggestions.