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James Campbell:
To give it away early. Here is the introductory chapter to the novel. Consider this and Chapter 2 to be the prologue.
Not much in the way of Lore here, and certain details are still pending, for example names of pirate/ raider gangs that loom around the coasts. This is more to set the scene for the first skirmish of the novel, and to become familiar with the characters
The boson character is also not set in stone. His name is Mister Ash Thomas, however for the moment he is more of a placeholder, so If you have an idea for a character, he can be shoehorned in if need be!
Feedback is appreciated and criticism is welcomed, as long as it is constructive.
Thanks!!!
http://sonsoficharus.blogspot.com/2016/03/sons-of-icharus-chapter-1.html
Schwalbe:
Play around with color schemes, because this is so bright it burns my eyes.
James Campbell:
Are you talking about the internet page? It's my blog that I use as a scrapboard and stuff. Sorry if it's ugly :D
Schwalbe:
It's too bright, that's what I meant.
About the story: I like how it goes so far, it's nice introduction. There are few mistakes, though I must say that I won't recall them now and I'm not a native speaker (PL).
A little hint for writing, from someone who tried it more in the past than would like to admit: write stuff down, LEAVE IT COMPLETELY ALONE for at least a week so you can forget stuff you wrote, come back to it when it sink and turns to dust, read it, correct stuff that is not sound.
Kamoba:
--- Quote from: Schwalbe on March 20, 2016, 03:03:06 pm ---It's too bright, that's what I meant.
About the story: I like how it goes so far, it's nice introduction. There are few mistakes, though I must say that I won't recall them now and I'm not a native speaker (PL).
A little hint for writing, from someone who tried it more in the past than would like to admit: write stuff down, LEAVE IT COMPLETELY ALONE for at least a week so you can forget stuff you wrote, come back to it when it sink and turns to dust, read it, correct stuff that is not sound.
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Can confirm this is a good thing to try!
Back when I used to write, if I re-read something while it was still fresh in my mind I would miss mistakes, or basic quality issues, but after re-reading after a long break, would find mistakes or re-write paragraphs to something which usually ended up reading smoothly.
Also agreed that the introduction feels good, looking forward to seeing more.
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